The first reason I'm desperate to have a class pet is that it teaches you if you ever want to be a teacher,babysitter ,looking after pets or anything were you need to look after other people's kids or animals.
The second reason is that I believe Halberg or any one that comes into Halberg will take care of the class pet we could even have rules ( like in the Icubes) and a chart like cazs chart just for feeding and cleaning the pet.
The third reason is kids like pets there are magnificent, cute and are fun to be with and I did a survey
and the results were 21 out of 24 kids craved a class pet.
Take me home!
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Chloe, in publishing your post. I deleted the photo sorry. Try and insert it again. I like the strong vocabulary you have used like 'I believe', 'magnificent' and 'craved.' You have a clear structure with introduction, reasons and conclusion. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteHi Chloe,
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you gave reasoning behind your argument because it made it much more persuasive. I think Alice will definitely consider getting a class pet. Next time I think you could check that all the grammar is in the right place. But apart from that it was very good.
Thanks for the advice libby!
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